Food Paper

In order to draft this paper, I needed to know how to both describe and organize a list that would effectively display my thesis. I only thought my essay was okay, but I didn't think it was perfect and knew it could use some revision. The first draft I wrote was relatively easy because most of the information that was put in the paper was in the packet we used to record our observations. The hardest part about writing the essay was making it personalized and trying to not make it boring. The best part about writing this paper was that I was able to write about cookies, which I enjoy writing about. The most frustrating thing about it was that it was extremely difficult to make interesting and not just fact filled. Within this draft i used transitions and a subject-by-subject organizational structure.
When I re-read my draft today, I liked the fact that i was able to read about cookies but I thought that the essay was very bland and like the cookies, needed more flavor.
My partner didn't really criticize my paper at all and he thought that it was very good and didn't need revisions.
Within my paper I believe that I should revise my transitions and make them more flavorful. My main goal would to be to make the paper an interesting piece and not boring.

Matt Rybak

Cookie essay

           

            During college composition, we read article “No Wonder They Call Me a Bitch,” by Ann Hodgman, about how one food critic literally ate dog food to see how it tasted. She ate disgusting varieties of dog food that would make one of a weak stomach to puke just at the sight of it. I was appalled by just reading it! Hodgman and her experiment led me to want to experiment for myself, but with a more easily digested food.

            Chocolate chip cookies are America’s favorite cookie. They were accidentally first baked in 1930 in a small inn named The Toll House Inn. While Ruth Wakefield was preparing to make a batch of cookies, she put in bits of Nestlé’s semi-sweet chocolate bar in order to make the batter chocolate. To her surprise, the chocolate bits didn’t melt and fuse with the batter, but softened within the cookie and as a result, the very first chocolate chip cookie was made.

            The first cookie that I tried was a chocolate chipped cookie from Chips Deluxe. At first look, the cookie looks very dry, cracked, and small. The smell was very appeasing with a delicious chocolate smell that made my mouth water. As I bit into it, the cookie was very crunchy, and very dry. It was lacking a chocolate flavor and the cookie overpowered it a little.

            The next cookie I tested was a sugar free chocolate chip cookie. At my first look, it looked delicious and I could almost see the sugar in it! But once I bit into it, I remembered that looks can indeed be deceiving. The cookie was stale, dry, and all I could taste was vanilla! There was absolutely no chocolate taste and I was very disappointed with the revolting taste in my mouth.

            After the sugar free cookie, I tested my favorite childhood cookie, I had huge expectations. It looked very crunchy and the chocolate chips were bulging out of each cookie. As I bit into the cookie, I felt like I bit into a rock! And I clenched my jaw and finally crushed my way through my first bite! It was disgusting and there wasn’t nearly enough chocolate! The cookie was amazingly bland and I was extremely surprised to know that I actually used to like this cookie.

            The Archway cookie was the first cookie that looked absolutely delicious! Before you even bit into it, you could tell that it was going to be good. It was a huge cookie and was as soft as a blanket! As I was looking at it, I could imagine biting into it and having the chocolate melt in my mouth. Once I finally bit into it, I had an entirely new take on the cookie. It was revolting and it almost tasted sour! The chunks of brown substance in the cookie could not have been chocolate because I could not taste any chocolate whatsoever.

            Wegman's is a grocery store that sells excellent food and it is where I do all of my grocery shopping. So when I realized that the next cookie that I would be testing was from Wegman's, I had very high expectations. From all of the horrible cookies that I have had before I could almost taste a delicious cookie before I even opened the package! When I took the cookie out of the package it was as soft as a pillow and was filled with chocolate chips. The chocolate chip cookie was as big as my hand and I could not wait to eat it. Once I bit into it, it was as soft as I thought it would be and the cookie dissolved in my mouth. For once, the taste was not too bad yet, I was still disappointed with the taste. It was a mediocre cookie and there really wasn’t that much taste but it was easily my favorite of the day.

            The last cookie that I tested was a cookie made by Pepperidge Farms. The packaging made the cookie look delicious and it was the one I wanted to try the most. When I picked out the cookie from the bag it was concealed in I could feel how soft it was through its plastic packaging. The first thing that I noticed was that the chocolate chips that dotted the cookie were a pale brown, unlike any chocolate chips that I had ever eaten. Once I bit into it, I realized that I should’ve thrown it away when I noticed that the color of the chocolate chips were off. The cookie was not very good and I can easily say that the packaging was the most misleading.

            Each cookie had an each and individual taste which defined each brand. Most of the cookies were horrible and I couldn’t even imagine how Hodgman ate all of that dog food. Throughout my experiment, I learned that trying different types of the same food can really give me a different outlook on what I’m eating. I plan on conducting the experiment again with other foods that I enjoy.